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Royal Member of BonBon Joined: 13 Apr 2008 Posts: 2620

I have picked up writing again. I'm going to be writing journal entries from Constance's diary. I'll focus on what Constance experiences in Bon Bon, and I might want to use some fursonas or side-characters from the comic, if I may.

While many of the stories I have planned are heavily focused on sex, it's not all going to be like that. If you would like me to use your fursona, just let me know, and also whether it's for anything sexual. I'm not making any promises, though. Some characters are easier for me to use than others, as their species or occupation might be of use, and a sexual encounter wouldn't necessarily include Constance.

The stories aren't meant to be in any specific order. They are just going to be glimpses from her diary, and may not even take place in the same year. I'm going to be posting them in the story section, and edit the first post of this thread with a link to each. Some stories are just going to be a single entry in the journal, while others may be told through several entries.

The Mayflower Diaries:
The First Time

Comments are of course always welcome. Whether it's feedback on a story, or a suggestion for how to use a character or something else.

http://www.furaffinity.net/user/arcsol/ · Rank: Super Veteran Joined: 28 Aug 2011 Posts: 1386

I give you permission to use Arcanus if you want

Rank: Super Veteran Joined: 12 Mar 2010 Posts: 4326

you have permission to use alvy, an if you want goa head and use alexandra.

any way i try and read some of the stories you put out. i know i liked reading what you had when i first started.

Royal Member of BonBon Joined: 08 Sep 2008 Posts: 3428

You can use Drodel if you want... *gose and reads what you got up now.*

Rank: Super Veteran Joined: 07 Nov 2009 Posts: 2846

Well you can use either fursona from me if you want. andrea or andrew.

Rank: Super Veteran Joined: 30 Sep 2009 Posts: 9138

ya have my full permission to use link collins when ever ya desire symphony

if ya would like a ref pic of him please dont be afrid to ask and if ya need any addinatl info of his personality likes

HEHE kinks as i dont mind him in sexuall encouters or just any plain genral info about him i'll be more then happy to provide

Rank: Super Veteran Joined: 25 Sep 2008 Posts: 1740

You're more than welcome to use Meng Long in any way.

Royal Member of BonBon Joined: 28 Jan 2008 Posts: 4122

You can use Henk and Dunya when ever you want.

maybe you can post it also on this website.

sofurry.com

Royal Member of BonBon Joined: 28 Jan 2008 Posts: 4122

just read your first post

to be honest it turned me on

make more please.

Royal Member of BonBon Joined: 13 Apr 2008 Posts: 2620

My Furaffinity Account · Rank: Super Veteran Joined: 14 Jul 2011 Posts: 2436

You can use mine if you feel the sudden and compelling urge to.

Rank: Super Veteran Joined: 04 Jul 2011 Posts: 1665

You can use mine aswell

Royal Member of BonBon Joined: 10 Dec 2007 Posts: 283

Interesting read Symphony.

If you want to use Tsavo or the Lion's Den Pub feel free. Although sex is frowned on inside the pub. The key to writing Tsavo would be quiet, and polite, but a little gruff. The bar itself is described in my sig.

http://www.furaffinity.net/user/arcsol/ · Rank: Super Veteran Joined: 28 Aug 2011 Posts: 1386

Hehe I guess I forgot to mention that you can use my shop as well, if you wish

Rank: Super Veteran Joined: 26 Mar 2011 Posts: 2709

Feel free to use Alex and Jessica Symphony.

It'd be an honor to have them appear in your work.

Royal Member of BonBon Joined: 22 Dec 2008 Posts: 2173

((Hey Symphony/Constance,

Okay, iffn you want to use Caroline you can. I'm not really sure how Constance would interact with the importer, but... who knows.

And, these are my thoughts on the story... so... them and $1.25 USD will get you a cup of coffee.

Anyway, about your diary entry. Um... I'm going to come at this from a different perspective. Did you want Constance's diary to be just about her sexual growth and adventures, or all about Constance? If you want it to be more the later (about all her life/adventures), it might work a spot better if you break up the story a bit.

For example, your whole bit of history with Vivian seems rushed. Which, in turn, made the whole diary entry read like a harlequin-romance book to me. It would have worked a lot better if your first diary or two entries were about Constance just meeting Vivian, and becoming friends with her. Doing things as neighbors first, going to school/music practice together, and then as friends, and then digging into things like their own budding curiosity about sexuality and the taboo. For example, Vivian could have snuck a bottle of her father's brandy, and convinced Constance to drink it with her. Both girls drink the brandy, and get really sick... but... in doing so, they bond together. That way, the next time, Vivian could bring up questions or thoughts about her body or Constance's... which, in turn, could lead them to exploring those avenues.

By writing it as you did, the entire story felt too... late-night Cinemax. So, while sexual and eros... it... lacked a connection with the characters for me.

Anyway, just some quick thoughts. ))

Royal Member of BonBon Joined: 13 Apr 2008 Posts: 2620

Thanks for the comments, Caroline. Very Happy

The diary isn't going to be about everything that happens in Constance's life. It's just going to be various short stories that I want to write. The first diary entry was inspired by Henk asking about her first time. I started thinking about it, and realized that it was something I could use. It's also just meant as a flaskback, so the next entry I write won't be a follow-up to the first one. Constance hasn't been writing a diary all her life. It's something she has started doing shortly before coming to Bon Bon. At some point, she simply wanted to "tell" the diary about what happened back then.

It might go back to writing more flashbacks about her early sex life, but for now I'll rather focus on her present time in Bon Bon. There might be chronological order to the entries, but I don't plan for them to be following each other closely.

Royal Member of BonBon Joined: 31 Dec 2007 Posts: 3215

I thought it was a very good read and I can't wait to read more. I don't know if Thomas would fit into your stories but if you want to use him then go ahead.

Royal Member of BonBon Joined: 08 Sep 2008 Posts: 3428

*facepalm* shoot i thought i replyed on here... apperenly i forgot. Symphony i flat out loved your story. Can't wait to read what more your going to put. Wink

Royal Member of BonBon Joined: 13 Apr 2008 Posts: 2620

Thanks for the comments. Very Happy

I haven't managed to write that much lately, but I'm working on a journal entry from around the time where Constance comes to Bon Bon.

Royal Member of BonBon Joined: 27 Jul 2005 Posts: 2568

Its ok Constance. I'll have to catch up. How many have you written so far?

Royal Member of BonBon Joined: 13 Apr 2008 Posts: 2620

I just have that first one. I've been kind of stuck creatively lately, so I haven't really been working that much more on it.

Rank: Super Veteran Joined: 07 Nov 2009 Posts: 2846

I know this is really late. but hoep everythign aboutt hese diaries go well. also remember you cna use any of my fursonas. if you read in the furosna section it says new fur youll see the chow chow(lee), pugs lee(pug, and chug li (pekinese crossdresser)

My FA · Rank: Senior Member Joined: 08 Apr 2012 Posts: 288

Dear Miss Mayflower, the fact that I'm a new-comer might be of use to you. If you so desire to use me. I just thought I would allow that even though this is an older post. I wish I had been on here much earlier... Maybe I could've spoken to many more of the royals of Bon Bon and contributed more...